Checking English...^^

• Before:

"Video games can influence on the human behaviour. Noawadays play male and female of different age, them interesting virtual life, because there thay can do what they want, no roles, no preasure from other peolpe And people become agressive after. For example female play Sims. The presence sexist stereotyping in games is hardly surprising. But it is influence on the state of mind, such as when you play you can do what you want but afterthis you want to try in the real life. There are many choices when people after game they went out and killed person or crushed something. At the real life for this you should pay, you can be arested.I think tha t after the playing games person can be change, because some of them can play all day, it is a drugs when yu try ones and cant life with out them. I think that should to influence to stop sell agressive games cwhich bring bad position. "

• My opinion:

"Video games can influence on the human behavior.Nowaday male and female players of different ages are interested in the virtual life,because they can do whatever they like there,with no roles and no presure from other people.After that,people becoming aggressive.For example female players play "The Sims".The presence sexist stereotyping in games is surprising.But it is influence on the state of mind, such as when you play that games you can do what you want in the game's world but after that you want to try in the real life.There are many situations when people after playing aggressive games went out and killed person or crushed something.And then,you could be arrested or payed.I think after playing an influence game,a person could change his personality, because some of them play all day, and becoming addicted and then can't live without that.I think it has to be stopped selling agressive games which bring bad opportunities. "

This is my checking....Comment please...^^